Coming From The Void - Chapter 5 - The Road Back To Where I Belong

Ollie_H

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Chapter One - The Beginning of The End'

'It all started on December 31st 2007 in Los Angeles, Not only the turn of a new century but my turn to become a man. My 18th birthday the big one. Everybody thinks of their 16th as the big one but honestly I wasn't one to do birthdays so had missed out on the ''supposed big one'' for my big 18th. All my mates and enemy's and mate's mates were there for one of what should have been the best night ever but was the strangest night ever. I'd woken up that morning with two totally extreme feelings. One of pure excitement and one of shere dread that if something went wrong not only would I be in loads of trouble but so would other people. I was just being silly as all hosts do and just hoped for the best.

It had been planned, checked, double checked and triple checked. I was pumped by midday and time wasn't moving fast I wish it would. Steph was gonna be there tonight and I wanted to impress. Things had been a bit strange between us over the whole of the building up weeks. I wasn't sure if we were off or we were on and if we were what was happening. The theme of the party was a neon rave with a band called 'The Mighty Pretenders' playing a set for me.

We weren't well off and the whole party was my present and nothing else. Not like on those shows where they pay for the whole lavish party and then get 3 fancy BMW's and a new house all to themselves. For me it was just the party and was all I wanted. Something to be remembered for all the right reasons. To the party I was gonna wear a yellow headband, a white wifebeater and some white trackies with lumionous yellow paint in war paint stripes on my face. We turned up at the club. The band were already there getting everything ready for themselves and the staff were there doing there bit. I walked into the room it was smokey and lights were going everywhere strobes and neon. And this was without anyone in. For us to have the smoke machine we had to turn the fire alarm off so it wouldn't pick it up. I walked outside to take a breath of fresh air and look at the scenery outside. The sun was setting and I knew my night was about to get started and was going to be crazy, mental, amazing I don't think there was a word to describe it. My best freinds Hugh, Angus and Jazzeh turned up and they had helped me through all the bad times of my life and here they were standing by my side. Nothing could have been better. The guests started to coming and I greeted them at the door and said things were just getting started.

Half an hour passed and all the guests were inside and I enetered at just the right moment the strobe came on and the neon looked amazing. There was a mosh pit at the front for the band everybody was pumped and dancing there heads off. I joined in and people were coming up to me and saying how sick the night was. In the middle of a song by the band and while the strobe was on there was a huge flash of light and soon the only thing you could see was the flames erupting at the back as they rushed towards us. Everybody was screaming and ran with people being pushed and shoved to move out the way.

I rushed outside to find mum. No sign of her. I couldn't wait for the firemen and pushing people off me I rushed inside the flames over bearing me, It was soo hot... I started shouting

MUM WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU?​
MUM MUM MU....'
 
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Great! Another one of these style stories. I'm loving em! Keep em coming guys. Very interesting and sad start but a very good one. Great write up and presentation. Love how it ended, screams fading away. Top stuff.
 
Great opening post. A mix of the ideas I gave you? :p

Hope you go with the right storyline and i'm glad I got you to do this story, mate. A mosh pit? :D

Hopefully you can continue this great start.
 
Nice start Ollie. Sounds interesting. It's good to see these 1st person stories coming to life :)
 
Great! Another one of these style stories. I'm loving em! Keep em coming guys. Very interesting and sad start but a very good one. Great write up and presentation. Love how it ended, screams fading away. Top stuff.

I love these type of stories and I love reading yours mate. These bring a lot of realism into a story and If I'm honest I don't like stories where your just some randomer picked off the street.

Great opening post. A mix of the ideas I gave you? :p

Hope you go with the right storyline and i'm glad I got you to do this story, mate. A mosh pit? :D

Hopefully you can continue this great start.

Yeah Jaz and I had a convo on msn to help me. So he is behind me starting this as he said he enjoyed my stories and he hadnt seen one in a while. So some Jazzeh influence don't know if anyone noticed I managed to sneek him in :p

Nice start Ollie. Sounds interesting. It's good to see these 1st person stories coming to life :)

Thanks trev your a ledgend around these parts of the forum!

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What a great start Ollie it was a great read. I hope everything is alright.

Thanks a lot mate, starting to write chapter 2 now. May get it up tonight. Hope you will all be regular viewers!
 
I definitely will be. I hear you about randomers off the street. It is very unrealistic and kind of overdone. This is original as everyone has their own writing and story lines and it brings a sense of realism into it. Good luck mate.
 
Chapter 2 - I'll see you soon xx

MUM WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU? MUM MUM MU....

MUM FOR GOD SAKE TALK TO ME.

THUD

I dont remember the rest of it but I imagine it went something a long the lines of, with the lack of oxygen I slowly began to not be able to breathe and fell to the ground. Luckily the firemen had just arrived and I was found really quickly while all waited outside, while I was lying in my hospital bed to me Hugh said

'When you went it was chaos, nobody knew what was going to happen and the police had turned up and told evrybody to contact there parents and tell them to pick them up, A lot of the girl were crying, including steph'

Jesus I'd forgotten completely about steph

'OMG Steph, Is she alright?'

'Yeah she's fine but she has been crying a lot and desperately wants to see you, along with a lot of the other people. Everybody was saying that it was such an amazing party and they were all having an incredible night. It's such a shame that happened, I mean I know you wanted a night to remember but I'm sure thats not how you imagined it would turn out to be.'

Thoughts started to rush through my mind, how did I get hold of steph? was anyone else hurt? What were the police going to do about the whole thing?

'Hugh, whats happened to me? what day is it? how's steph? is anyone else hurt?'

'Ollie, calm down,everyone else is fine just a bit shocked over the whole incident and want to know if you are okay, but I have some really bad news to tell you and I don't know how your going to take it and I'm really sorry'

At that exact moment, my stomach turned what had happened, Steph was alright who was it?

'What has happened? seriously tell me?' I replied in haste

'Ollie, I don't really know how to say this but you won't be able to see your mum again'

'What are you on about? Where has she gone?' I shouted so most of the hospital could here.

'Ollie, I'm so sorry but everyone thought I was the best person to do this to you, but your mum died in the fire'

Tears shed from my eyes, uncontrollablly I could stop crying. I said 16 was a birthday I had never done anything big on but the real reason was my dad died in a car crash coming back from work on the day before my birthday.This had been the worst moment of my life to date. The day of what should have been one of the best days of my life I was mourning the loss of my dad. I couldnt help but cry the whole day and it was day I always wanted to forget. My mum and I were stunned we just didn't know what do with ourselves. Word spread round pretty quickly and it was all over the news that there had been a car crash. We won compensation for it but money can never bring back the one you love the most. My dad and I were the father and son, best friends, inseprable. #


'Hugh' I tried to talk through the tears coming through my eyes, 'What's the date?'

Hugh put his arms around me, and replied 'Ollie, It's the first of January 2008.'

Brilliant I thought the worst start to the new millenium. I had just turned 18, I was lying in a hospital bed with my best mate sitting next to me, I had just had a party to remember for no good reasons and now I had no parents to turn to when I was in need of help. My Phone rang but all of a sudden I broke into a hot sweat and the only words I could here

'
MUM WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU? MUM MUM MU....


MUM FOR GOD SAKE TALK TO ME. with the tears pouring down my face'​
 
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Good update there Ollie and some nice writing. Sad for his Mum to die and I don't know how he'll manage to cope with the depression and all.

Keep this going mate.
 
Chapter 3 - A New Beginning'



I'd just been released for the hospital and could barely bring myself to live, I just wanted for a hole to open up in the ground and swallow me alive. I could barely bring my self to talk to anyone or look up to have eye contact with anyone. As I walked along the road kicking the path in disgust I thought to myself where I was at my stage in life. I had turned 18 just the day before, could barely remember my party the night before. The bits I remember were when i was welcoming everybody, the spark and then running back in to find my mum only to pass out and nearly have my life taken aswell. So I had just turned 18, to be correct I was now 18 years and a day old. I had had a night that I barely knew anything about but it wasn't the night I wanted it to be. Worst of all I now had no parents to control what I wanted to do and tell me where I was going wrong. I had my friends but sometimes friends dont tell you what you need to hear. I'd told Hugh to not tell anyone about me being released so I didn't have a rush of people coming to visit me as I could barely deal with being with myself never mind anyone else. you know what they say, Don't hate yourself and your the only person you have to live with for the duration of your life. I think at the moment I needed to die as I couldn't live myself and blamed myself for both my parents death. My dad's because I had asked him to come early so we could go out and play basketball on our drive with the basketball hoop and then he was involved in the car crash on the way back. If I hadn't asked him to come back early he wouldn't have been involved and also I blamed myself for my mums bday as I had been asking for a big party for years and she had said something would go wrong but as she know I didnt usually have parties she would let me have it. If I'd listen to mum she would still be here today.

My phone rang in my pocket to see that it was my Auntie Caroline who lived in Australia. She said she had been trying to contact me on the day but she couldnt and she had herd that something may have happened on the news in our area so was concerned as she knew it was my birthday. I tried to stop myself from crying I was said quitely 'mum's not alive anymore' she was shocked and speechless and said she would get on the first plane she could to come and see me. She knew how much my dad's death had affected me.

So as I got home I saw a new car sitting on the drive way an envelope on the front.

It read

Dear Ollie,​

I know you have been looking forward to this party for a long time and hope you really enjoyed your night but there is another surprise and now you have seen it. I know you werent expecting this but I love you loads and want you to be happy. Look forward to seeing you in the morning

Mum
xxx​

I broke into another cold sweat, crumpled to the floor and my head started spinning, I could hear voices outside me asking if I was okay but the only thing I could see was the flames and me shouting


MUM WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU?​
MUM MUM MUM TALK!'
 
Nice read there, Ollie. It got sad towards the end and getting the car jsut through you over the edge. Sorry to hear bout his Dad as well.

Loving it mate, keep it going. :)
 
Wow! Great story, brought tears to my eyes it was so realistic, sorry to hear you're an orphan now but great read KUTGW
 
Let me get this straight, you guys are consolidating a fictional character? :p

Great work Ollie. Very deep and emotional start. Looking forward to see where you go with this...
 
Wow. Ollie do you have personal issues :p? Great read though. Very realistic as it's not all pooping roses on easy street. Yes I got that line from The Simpsons. Once again great read and very emotional and deep.
 

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