Story Paree's Career Dairy:Story of a little boy:Mumbai Innings

[surendar]

Mate, one small suggestion - though game has taken you to feel sad about the mamoth total, it would be nice to write up the grief emotions which you felt on field if you would have been really there on the context.

As in, " I was made to run here & there near the boundary ropes as my captain asked me to stay near the boundary. Most of the times either felt bored to stay near ropes or, just had to run in lost path. This is completely ridiculous & all I want was my bowlers to finish their things off & to get a handle on the bat once again! "

Something like that, will add good flavors to the story readers. Good luck.

 

[Paree]

Mate, one small suggestion - though game has taken you to feel sad about the mamoth total, it would be nice to write up the grief emotions which you felt on field if you would have been really there on the context.

As in, " I was made to run here & there near the boundary ropes as my captain asked me to stay near the boundary. Most of the times either felt bored to stay near ropes or, just had to run in lost path. This is completely ridiculous & all I want was my bowlers to finish their things off & to get a handle on the bat once again! "

Something like that, will add good flavors to the story readers. Good luck.

Thanks.This kind of tips will be really helpful as you are a "legend" in story writing.Thanks Suren